hdyy 发表于 2014-12-19 00:25   全显示 1楼
文章写的算是比较细腻，虽然没有用过多的性爱情节的描写，
总体上属于幻想和想象的文章，不过有点没有高潮部分的突出
点，显得有些弱，幻想的与偷窥的成分再突出一点则会更好
不过现在好的绿文也许大家要求高了，明显不如以前的好
可能是大家国语浮躁了，也许是过多的高清黄片让大家不愿意多写了
就像手都懒了一样，鼓励一下啊勤奋的同学们！！
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